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Raw energy. Damn good

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🫶🫵

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This is super clever and incredibly well done. It has the density of a star bracing for supernova.

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THANK hah it has been very head-swelling to have a lot of the authors I respect and enjoy saying nice things haha it means a lot

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sure things. loved it! Really inspired by the form

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Damn I can feel this simmering. It’s small but explosive. A universe in a nutshell. I had to read it again because I didn’t want to miss anything. Great stuff.

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Thank you so very much! I do feel like I packed a lot in there lol I was worried it was too much

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The layers of words and their significance are so rich! I love how you can excavate new meanings each time. Not too much!

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Thanks 🥲 means a lot

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Damned clever stuff. word play. poetry. machine-like rhythm creating sounds in my mind. I can feel my own oven gloves. smell them. perfect.

A whole life boiled down and baked to a crisp finish then served up in rhe time it takes to eat one hot slice.

RIGHTEOUS GOOD. 😎

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Thanks very much! I have been pleasantly surprised by the positive feedback

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sometimes you dont seem to know how good the writing is you did until you get the feedback and realise how good it hits. I dont think ive read anything quite like how this piece worked (for me anyway!)

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Yeah I agree, and sometimes the inverse is true. I think a piece is really good, but it doesn’t seem to garner much attention lol

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Keith...my dude...this fuckin good.

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Thank you so much! I was definitely channeling your [57] and Sticks energy — along with some other stuff I’ve read recently on here. Was trying to branch out and do something different, so it’s very nice to hear that it works well haha

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I'm honored. 🙏

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This is absolutely brilliant. So many layers, so much detail. Stripped.

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[I] (thank) {you}¡

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I see what you did <there>.

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Wow, Keith! This a whole new level of Mr. Long! Impressed.

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Thanks! It was fun to stretch myself lol

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