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Fucking stunning Keith. Ingenious premise - so imaginative and exploding with reality - and the lines of the play just effortless woven in, and an aching story underneath it all that rears a poignant head at the finish - I shall be most surprised if you do not take the trophy home sir!

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Oh wow, thank you! I am quite pleased with the way it turned out, though I will be most surprised (pleasantly) if I do take it home haha

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Goddamn, this is good. Really, really good. I tip my hat.

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👈🤠Thank ye much, mister.

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Wow this is such a unique story! I really enjoyed Deb as a character his dedication to the craft. The message behind his story becomes so much more meaningful after reading the twist at the end as well. Great job Keith!

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Thank you so much! I’m glad the mild twist actually works haha

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Yesss this is my favorite short story for the world I love it so much!

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Thanks! I added a decent amount to it and I think it turned out good — I’m happy with it lol

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Yes it’s amazing :))

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This is tremendous! I was swept away, and to find Deb’s lineage at the end of it … chef’s kiss!

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Thank you so much! I’m glad that part came out, because I wasn’t sure I was… sneaky enough haha

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You were the perfect amount of sneaky!

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Keith, as always, your worldbuilding is so vivid and engrossing. Detailed but serving the needs of the story. Deb is a distinct, memorable character, easy to relate to in terms of his hopes, fears, and struggles. I loved how you tied up the end. 💜

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Thank you!! I tried to make it a minor reveal so I’m very pleased it turned out that way haha

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