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An ingenious weaving of memories and the present moment that creates an eerie tapestry of shame and guilt. Once I started reading, I couldn't stop. Beautifully and terrifyingly done.

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Very mysterious and poignant section titles, too! I had to look up what they meant. Love how they had another layer of meaning.

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I’m so glad someone looked them up or at least understood their purpose there! They are words I have become familiar with through different mediums — music, movies, books, and each one fit quite well

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This was so well done! The slow unfolding and reveal of Darren’s past was so heartbreaking and unsettling, and the descriptions were beautiful.

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Thank you very much for the kind comment! I’m glad you liked it and it’s always special to hear someone enjoy my writing

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Beautifully written and narrated.

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Thank you so very much for checking it out and commenting, I really appreciate it!

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Haunting heartbreaking and sad 💗 beautiful!

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This comment showed up but then disappeared, now it’s back! Thank you so much for reading it, I’m glad you felt all that I tried to put in there.

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I felt a lot of things :) great story!

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Wow that was incredible, such a rich sensory landscape as well as emotional.

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Thank you very much! I’m glad you enjoyed it

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I like how the story on peels itself open.

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Thanks! It was fun trying to trick the reader a little lol

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A powerful guilt trip to hell. Thank you.

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No, thank YOU

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These were magnificent!

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Thank you thank you thank you!

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